Are my lyrics any good?

[Bane]

Basically i always listen to uk hip hop and grime and i thought i'd write some lyrics and try write something unique... tell me what you think please..

money fashion and greed and passion everything a young man feels out on tha lash 'n
with all the power of the leaders the cowards the decievers sent from the depths to gradually feed us
with hate in our hearts 2012 the apocalpse starts, the devils usin you for spare parts.

so i need to know why, why the egyptians worshipped beings from the sky
and why with every try its obvious we fail to succeed in building some they built but ours out of greed
go outside plant a seed and lead us into a better state because i can demonstrate fate
and show you how to be concious because the worlds full of monsters
do you understand the world full of secrets yet we'd like to ignore them and act like we're speechless
man im not speechless im tryna burn off the leaches and find the lords true speeches
im just reaching.. out to all the clever minds that arent in a prison of not hearing clever rhymes
so take the journey and for those who heard me know that the devil could never turn me

bane.

[Justin Credible]

like the ryhme structure still. content was abit here an there but would like to hear how that would sound on track
as it rhymed well reading it off the screen.

[Bane]

cheers man, i havent really got a good voice for it man. anyone is welcome to have ago.

[Bane]

Bumppp - feedback pls

[316]

ur the best tbh u should get a record deal
record a demo ok

[Mercury]

@El Asesino is this you

[GrimmeySimmey]

ur the best tbh u should get a record deal
record a demo ok

.

[Bane]

el asesino

[Mute]

Be a ghost writer.

[Bane]

a ghost writer?

[Mercury]

use your own voice anyway

[R-Style]

Normally when someone asks this question the answers no..

Also it's pointless if you're not spitting, everyone will read the lyrics in different way/different flows/different emphasise on different words. It doesn't matter what your voice sounds like if you only want feedback on your lyricism

[DTR]

a ghost writer?

Someone who writes lyrics for somebody else.

[Mercury]