Dot rotten 'master at work' beat vocalled - feedback please

[sa'id]

I think it's good lyrically, but any tips on recording and spitting technique would be much appreciated.

Let's us know what you think ...


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TkKxX4pBrfw

[CrisCito]

I thought it was shit to be honest...you just killed that beat...in the bad way.

[D*evil*s]

wtf.... i dont fink spitting is made out for you

[T.Fitz]

hmmmm dont quit ur day job

[Seven]

the 1st set a bars lost me

[sa'id]

thanks for the comments so far (although i would have liked better ones!!)

i don't reckon i spit that well, but i reckon it could sound better with a bit of good production etc. but really, i don't care about that. it's more about the lyrics ... i'm iraqi from england (bradford) and wanna give voice to my people.

so ... really i'd prefer the song to start a debate about politics ... as opposed to musical technique. although any tips on how to make it sound better are still much appreciated

salaaam

[sa'id]

hey, thanks for the reply lumos - do you mean the meaning or the clarity

i'll break it down ... a few months ago i read a newspaper article about an iraqi government initiative to give doctors in iraq guns to protect themselves coz they are a target. and this is what the first set of bars is about. i just though it was fucked ... 6 years after a war to 'free' us and doctors are carrying guns to protect themselves.

salaam